a heart beat is born
with every breath away
my lungs are warm
with every tear,
with every wound left not to bleed/shed again
why would i not be gone!
shattered, i look up and its a very long road ahead
this time, i smile.
*this final piece goes to dooda :)
20 comments:
*BANG BANG*
SHOTGUN !!
*fireworks*
*Applause*
*Cheers*
Didnt think id see it this fast but glad i did, me likey alot especially since u ended it with a smile =)
shooooooot gun ? how would I know with this moderation thing ?
smile?
but she's gonna fall into the water and drown ;p
ento bssss!! hatha ili thabi7kum al shot guns lol
aham shay !! :p yl dathreeeeeeeen!
Touchy! amazing ;)
I Hope it's gonna be the end if u know what i'm talking about ;)
ayyyy shay ya shag7aa ma hagiathaa wasted shoot :S
anyways nice poem, atleast there is a smile at the end ;)
lol
*carls:
"earth to carls ... earth to carls"
something called imagination, use it ;) heheheheh
*zizo:
i know what u mean ... well its a start not an end.
no3ik ;p
u can always not publish and reject shotgun comments :P
i f*cking write a poem and all u can talk about is shot guns lol
typical men!! hehehhehehehe bada3taw.
tra 7adech 6omarty foogy :@ moooooooo shoot gun ;p
ayyy the most thing that touched me is: "i smile"... really i smiled when i read this line... hope my babe is what keeps us moving, it is what push us through this "long road"..
loved it..
Go You and ME!
:p
*Smile*
*common:
ee ok twni ashofa ;) thanks bro
*marzouq:
wonderfuly said!
mashalah 3laik. i like how u can simplify things.
*reem:
the word smile, i chose as a closing for this poem, after all the pain we can say despair and agony,
a smile was born, which only tells u u can always carry on from where stoped.
im glad u like it ;)
Go You and ME!
*d.r:
:) that made me smile!! thank u.
*1509:
i think anyone can smile,
we need to feel and actually mean it when we do :)
The Smile Is The Cure of all. :-)
-sighs-
i have no words
i'm empty and want more
i beg of you at least two to three pieces a week...your writing makes me escape reality and cherish every letter that forms so much..
encore and i want more
* i live in q8:
yeees ... but not all all 3ad :p
something in life need more than just that ;)
*batty:
omg!! ur comment left me speachless aswell!! ur comments have always been just so different than everyone elses .. theyre truly felt :*
a7ibich :*
ill do my best inshalah what ever batty wants ;p
and i must say:
same to you ;)
Don't go. Please.
hehehehe
"shes" going where she needs to go.
im not going anywhere ;)
I wasn't talking to you. :P
heheheh
quit being an A :p
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